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Wed Nov 30, 2011 8:38 pm |
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Uhm...something I've worked on quickly...
((This is something I wrote while playing Tales of the Abyss...no spoilers though I'm not done...anyway I'd appreciate hearing what you think))
In the year 3023, a calamity will cover the planet altering its face permanently, in this time the lost races will return and restore the planet dividing it amongst the species and enslaving the humans. In the years, that follow this prosperity will come to the new land in the north named Laverdia the land of the great wood. The people of this land will be the elves and they will thrive despite interference from Morkan’thalla the vampire’s realm of eternal night in the year 153 of the new calendar. In this time, the humans who had been enslaved shall free themselves and forge a new nation to a newly fertile wasteland in the south. This shall harbor a time of war between all of the races on Earth and last for 2000 years. In this time there will be a sign from the goddess that will lead to the war’s end it will be visible by….
First Prophecy of Lady Melissa Old Earth year 2011
Andrelean looked down at the screen trying to decipher the rest of the prophecy it had almost been 2000 years since the Kirandavian war had started the Goddess’ sign would be seen soon. She shook her head they would never know what the last part of the prophecy read. The prophecy had been written in separate parts each one a different language from the others.
“Why must the others be so stingy with their languages,” She said standing “They know of the importance of this prophecy as much as the Laverdians.”
She stepped away from the computer before recasting the barrier that guarded it from those who were unauthorized. The heels of her boots lightly clicked on the wooden floors as she walked out into the main cathedral hall. A warm sensation filled her body as she stepped into the warm sunlight streaming through the enchantments on the stained glass windows. Judging by the length of the shadows it appeared to be midday, which meant she had not stopped working since sundown the previous day.
“Wonderful” She said smiling to herself “Tis no wonder I am so tired…perhaps Lira has something that could wake me up…it wouldn’t do for me to shirk my duties for sleep”.
She had to stifle a yawn as she walked out of the cathedral and into the capital city of Verdant.
“Lady Andrelean” She looked up seeing a child running towards her.
The boy was a dark elf there was no mistaking his skin color or features, the golden eyes and white hair signified he was one of the purer bloodlines. She could also see the tears in his eyes and concern crossed her features. Tensions between the high elves and the Drow were still strained even after 2000 years.
“What is the matter child?” She asked softly as the child came up and gripped the skirt of her gown “Why are you crying?”
“Its daddy…he’s hurt” The child sobbed, “Y-you have to help him…p-please.”
Her features softened and she knelt down gently placing her hand on his head sending a calming aura out.
“Calm down…tell me what happened” She said softly.
“D-daddy…h-he was working…on the house” He said between sobs “A-and a bird…came out…it clawed him…and he fell…you have to hurry…”
“Show Me,” She said softly standing.
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He pulled the cloak tighter around himself growling lightly cursing the bright sun that beat down on him. Cold dark eyes stared out from underneath the cloak looking at each elf that passed him by.
“Damn Verdan” She said with a sneer “Why’s it have to be so sunny…attendant provide shade”.
“Yes Master Locaan” A young woman cloaked as he was came forward with her parasol “Is this better?”
He nodded his approval and motioned for his entourage to continue their trek to the Cathedral and he wondered what good this meeting would do.
“Locaan the shady” He stopped hearing the insult and looked over at the Dwarf Queen Mithranael “How’ve ya been since Lithrain.”
“Quite well no thanks to your army” He said simply “And this accursed sun…how do you stand it.”
She shrugged with a hearty chuckle joining him on their walk, even in wartime she was good-natured. This was not unusual to them it was well known that the vampire and the dwarves had been allies since the battle to decide Lithrain.
“The sun can be quite harsh when ya leave our citadel” She said “But one get’s used to it”
Locaan shrugged as he continued walking but stopped with a growl seeing the leaders who had arrived so far. The human leaders Miriam and
Korain’tan were standing in front of the door impatient as their kind seemed to enjoy being.
“Oy Bloodsucker…” Korain’tan yelled at them “Where’s the elf queen.”
“They had better start showing respect” Locaan growled angrily “I won’t tolerate being called Bloodsucker.”
“I agree…” Mithranael replied, “I’m tired of their attitude.”
“Did you hear me” Korain’tan yelled again “I was talking to you.”
“Darling” Miriam said softly “Please be quiet this is not the place to start yelling”.
“Oh be quiet” Korain’tan snapped annoyed “They have no right to keep us humans waiting.”
Locaan flashed his fangs with a threatening growl as he walked up shutting the human king up. His eyes fell on the queen and he bowed out of respect Mithranael did the same and gave the woman a soft smile. The Cathedral appeared to be empty, which meant the elven queen was not in now so they would have to wait. Locaan walked over to a shady part of wall and leaned back against it to wait as the other leaders began to come forth.
“It is quite strange” He said, “We were invited and our host is not here.”
“She has other duties” Miriam said softly “She is the sole leader.”
Locaan nodded and looked around for their gracious host after all if she did not show up they would not get anything done.
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Andrelean stopped on her way back to the Cathedral seeing the other leaders there and bit her lip. She had forgotten about the meeting and sighed she had forgotten to get something to wake her up but she would have to suffer through this.
“Good day my fellow leaders” She said approaching the door “I must apologize for my tardiness…I had an important matter to attend to in the village”.
She walked past them to the cathedral’s doors when she heard Korain’tan’s voice.
“Whatever the hell it was…it couldn’t have been more important than me,” He said.
“It was life and death” She replied, “More important than your wounded pride human…come friends let us have this meeting inside.”
She led them inside the cathedral making sure to cast a shade spell over the windows for the comfort of Locaan. The meeting room however was in the back of the cathedral and would receive no true sunlight, as they walked Locaan lowered his hood revealing black hair, dark crimson eyes, and pale skin.
“This is a magnificent cathedral Queen Andrelean,” Miriam said.
“I thank you for your compliment Highness…however I am no queen…I am more a priestess” Andrelean stated “I am referred to as Lady not a title of royalty”.
“I am sorry Lady Andrelean,” Miriam said softly.
Andrelean merely nodded and stopped before the door to the meeting room as the attendants opened the door.
“King Locaan…the meeting hall is lit with artificial light…I do not know if that will harm you” She said “I would recommend your cloak”.
“Artificial light is no trouble Lady Andrelean” He replied, “That is how Morkan’thalla creates light for our visitors.”
She nodded and led them inside the large chamber it consisted of a single table large enough to seat all of them and many more. A small screen was situated at each chair as each leader moved to take their spot. Andrelean took her place at the head of the table as was customary for each country. She glanced around at the leaders gathered unsure of what would be accomplished here.
“My fellow leaders it is with great hope that I have requested your presence,” She said softly pressing a button on her screen “As you see before you the prophecy of Lady Melissa if you have not read it…please do so now.”
There were a few murmurs from the leaders as they read over the prophecy and she couldn’t help but smile softly. She had given each of them a different part of the prophecy the one written in their language. Locaan was the first to look up and smirked at her before laughing heartily.
“What are you playing at elf” He said “This is not the prophecy…at least not all of it”.
“What” Mithranael said looking up then back to the screen “He’s right…what’s this about”.
The other leaders joined in voicing their concern and dismay for the situation as Andrelean stood raising her hand to silence them.
“You have each received a separate portion of the prophecy” She said softly “For you are each needed to read the prophecy”.
“What do you mean?” Miriam asked receiving a glare from her husband.
“The prophecy is written in several parts each one in the separate languages of this planet’s people” she said “How Lady Melissa knew our basic languages is a mystery but she wrote each prophecy in that language…perhaps to ensure that we would come together at the end of this war”.
“Yeah right” Korain’tan scoffed “We all know Melissa was one of us…she probably wanted to make sure you selfish elves wouldn’t try to steal the prophecy for yourselves”.
“Silence yourself human” The Undine king shouted from down the table “You speak out of turn”.
“Please friends be at peace” Andrelean said softly “Now is not the time to argue…it has almost been 2000 years since this war began…we can soon expect the sign from the goddess…what I ask is that we work together”.
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Its good for a start I think...I've not played Tales of the Abyss...so Im not sure how this relates to that...or if this is aimed more at people who have played it...your level of detail is good...obviously the grammar needs to be worked on...but thats not a big deal or anything XD
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Mon Dec 05, 2011 10:28 am |
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Oh no Tales of the Abyss just kinda inspired me...and I was bored while doing the battles...
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You going to continue it then?
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Tue Dec 06, 2011 10:39 am |
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Hopefully...though not really sure how...I mean...except the obvious beuracracy...I am still not really sure where I'm going with this...-_-
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