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The Strife Brothers By Marth (Prologue)
Okay this is the first chapter of a story ive been workin on for some time but i havnt been latley cuz i didnt know if it was good so id like to get some feed back if you like it notify and ill tell you when i add more chapters.
PROLOGUE - THE BEGGINING
The evening was cold, the air wash stale and dry, Storm took shallow breaths so his trackers wouldnt hear him. He glared at the cabin with unbblinking eyes searching for a sign of life within. The cabin was the last chance for his two sons Cloud and Contact who were crying in the night. Storm muffled the crys with the wolfe fur that surrounded them as a Slurge darted by. Storm Cradled the boys in his arms when finaly a lamp flickered to life and a tall dark figure emerged from the door and crept to a nearby barn. Storm heard more Slurge closing in so he darted to the cabins porch with breakneck speed. He layed the children on the porch and kissed them both on the forhead and said "Goodbye my sons i will be back for you,"
"Hey!" yelled the man from the barn. Storm quickly looked over his shoulder and darted off into the darkness.
End of Prologue - The begging (Part 1)
so hows it soundin so far?
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Great. Very descriptive. Makes me want to read the rest.
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Ok here is some more
Prologue - The Beginning (Part 2)
Storms enemies were closing in on him. The dry air mad it hard to breath, he had been running since midnight and the sun was begging to rise. "Just one more mile," he thought, "Just onw more mile and we will be reunited." He panted as he lent against a tree in front of him. His head jerked backwards as he herd a arrow loose from a bowstring. He quickly ran up the tree and flipped over the arrow as it plowed into the tree in that layed in front of his formal posistion. He took a deep breath as he sped off just b4 another arrow hit him.
Blizzard was prancing around the ship preparing to set sail. Kalma had her big brown eyes fixated ion the end of the rickity dock waiting for her loves arrival. "Kalma! We have to go if he isnt hear soon!" yelled Blizzard over the shrill winds "GO! if you want but i won't leave without him!" She ansewered in her kind but determined voice. "I can' leave you Storm would never forgive me!" replied Blizzard preparing for the worst and belted his sword holding the hilt. Just then Storm came bounding down the dock. "Prepare the boat the Slurge are right behind me!"
end of Prologue - The Begging (PART 2)
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Mon Jul 02, 2007 1:23 pm |
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Wonderful, you know I don't even usually like prologues and I like this one.
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Daily Quote: "Faithful are the wounds of a friend, but the kisses of an enemy are deceitful."
| crazed4now wrote: |
You're my new favorite person, endy. |
| Gencdo wrote: |
| endy. I've decided you are now the proud owner of all my hugs! |
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People who have hugged me:
crazed xINFINITY (Big hug winner! Gets exclusive oncoming hugs!)
Gary
Melkor
Arc
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Tsuki
Kintai
SuperSayianBahamut
Gencdo
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