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Elemental Legacy
Umm...Ive been working on this book for a long time and still am, so i guess ill just post the beginning bit for now. Tell me what you think... 
ELEMENTAL
LEGACY
WRITEN BY: JESSE URE
Partially Revised: version 1.2
---------------------------------------------Prologue; Part 1-------------------------------------------
On a planet called Zytherious, in the early years of its life, civilization was flowing nicely. There were two Controctrus, or Elemental Masters making their way to Finakacolamu, or The Tower of Deciding Finality. They were to do what no one was able to do, defeat the great evil called Darcksamos, simply known by civilians as Decider of the Void. No one knows his form, so they did not know what to expect. Through great difficulty they had one, but one of the Elemental Masters had received an injury no one could identify. The evil of the Void radiated from the wound for two years, and one day something they all expected had happened, and worse. The wound had filled him with evil pure from the Void, and possessed his body like some weird ghost story, only this one was deadly beyond anything anyone could ever imagine. This man completely destroyed the town he was resting in, and escaped. His ally Controctus found him in a abandoned castle, which had been magicly rebuilt somehow, though he knew his possessed friend couldn't of done it....at leats not alone.
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Now, about three-hundred-seventy-one years later, in the region of Nutrakten, or Normalia as is locally known, a young boy was walking home from school. (Seems simple enough, but this little walk will change our hero’s life, maybe forever.) His mysterious spiky blue hair was flowing in the breeze, and he was wearing his favorite outfit. He felt comfortable in his blue cotton shirt with a fleece orange vest over it, along with his baggy blue pants that he loved for how well they breathed. He kept his red and white shoes clean, and his blue eyes were involuntarily scoping the landscape of the town for something interesting.
When he was born the Elemental Wheel was on his left pectoral, but no one knows why, along with the blue spiky hair. The Elemental Wheel is the sacred symbol of the planet Zytherious, which is much like earth. The Few key differences are that they have electricity, and some guns, but swords and bows and the like are still favored. It’s like the medieval era and present day of earth in one. Ah, the Elemental Wheel, symbol of the eight elements of Zytherious. It starts with Fire at the top, Water, and Electricity. Wind at the bottom, Earth, Ice, then back to Fire. The Elements of Light and Dark fill the middle. Now that this has been told, so shall our adventure unfold.
-------------------------------Chapter 1: His adventure begins; Part 1: Annoying Door! ----
“Ouch….that sucked…,” Commented Leon. “I’m going to go complain to the mayor, he's got to fix that sidewalk. That’s the third time since Monday I’ve tripped on that damn piece of cement!” He stood up, rubbing his knee, and walked toward the mayor’s house. He was Passing threw the park, and he had to stop and admire the beauty. The lush emerald green grass giving way as the children run around under the azure sky, layered with wispy serous clouds, always catches Leon’s eye. He loves beautiful days like this.
He started off again, and noticed something shine from under the slide. Out of curiosity, as he is over-curious, he went under the ladder and cleared away the patch of dirt. Leon gasped as he saw a partially rusted door, in the ground.
“Whoa, since when has this been here?” And where does it go? He grabbed the handle, and pulled. It didn’t budge. Leon wasn’t going to either. He grasped it with both hands, and pulled with all his might. He made a defiant grunt, and kicked the door. He was plunging into darkness before he realized what was happening. Did I just fall through the door?! Considering how he felt weightless, he guessed an affirmative. He looked for something to grab onto to, but he couldn’t see anything as he fell, it was just to dark. He started to scream and through his hand out. It was like one of those classic nightmares when you plunge into infinite darkness, and you just fall and fall and fall… Leon stopped screaming. He had realized that screaming won’t help him like it did in the third grade. There has got to be something I can use to catch myself, he thought. He made a desperate attempt and reached out, and his hand met a metal rung. He grabbed it and yelped as he suddenly stopped, all the force on his arm. "Ahh...gah...damnit...." he hung there for a few moments, then grabbed another rung with his other hand. "It's...a ladder? Hmm...wonder where it goes. Well, only one way to find out."
There is more..if you want it....
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Sat Aug 18, 2007 12:57 pm |
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whooooo thats not bad at al!l its quite interesting!
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Well, its only part one of chapter one...Each Chapter has four parts...if you want I could get the next bit up...
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more please :3
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umm..alright...ill edit the next bit then....
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