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Final Fantasy: The Lost Chapters
Chapter One
Funny isin't it . When you are at the brink of death. Some people say that your life flashes in front of your eyes, 'but it's not like that. Not this time anyway. I was a bounty hunter on a high paying job to kill this guy that had been terroising the streets. Now i wished i turned it down. The person said that they had seen him in anbandoned house on the outskirts of Askia ,
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So far.. it's a little short 
If you want my opinion, I think that
'but that is not the case in this matter' should be changed to something like 'but it's not like that. Not this time anyway.'
and isin't is spelt isn't 
not bad so far though apart from the spelling
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just to note that is not all the first chapter just a part of it and thanks for the line
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As Torfiwyn said, it's a bit short but I like it! Give us more! 
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I like it so far. please post more.
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Askia was a kind of place that you would not like to live, it was a place full of crime and poverty with a murder count to match, it was the perfect place to hide.... but not for long.
In the streets there were children crying begging for change from passers by. humph.. some of them armed, others not , but at that time i didn't care. Soon as i arrived at the place i was blocked by two people, proberly muggers trying to get stuff off me... but they chose the wrong guy to mess with
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Oh... violence... I smell violence!
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and as god said when the world became peacefull " let there be violence"
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Chapter One
Funny isin't it . When you are at the brink of death. Some people say that your life flashes in front of your eyes, 'but it's not like that. Not this time anyway. I was a bounty hunter on a high paying job to kill this guy that had been terroising the streets. Now i wished i turned it down. The person said that they had seen him in anbandoned house on the outskirts of Askia
Askia was a kind of place that you would not like to live, it was a place full of crime and poverty with a murder count to match, it was the perfect place to hide.... but not for long.
In the streets there were children crying begging for change from passers by. humph.. some of them armed, others not , but at that time i didn't care. Soon as i arrived at the place i was blocked by two people, proberly muggers trying to get stuff off me... but they chose the wrong guy to mess with
I was never one of those people that would strike down a person without a reason espically the street trash but something was diffrent about these, their eyes were pitch dark with a burning rage but still with my trusty sword they were felled and would nerver rise again, espically not on my watch.
When i finally arrived at the building i first felt a bit uneasy but i shock out of it
Jack:looks like it time to say hi
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wow. is this hero a male? is it gonna have a love theme cuz that would be alsome. i'm looking forward to the beginning to a perfect ending. ^_^
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the hero is a male
there will be a love triangle or whatever
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Chapter 2
After i "rudely" kicked the door down. The place was silent because the fact that nobody was there confirmmed that, but instead i saw a lot of empty drink bottles that were probably left from other people that might of once lived here
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It's good so far....^^
Very catchy.
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